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    dots Submission Name: Nothing New Reallydots
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    Author: SanctityExposed
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 48/66/40
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 562
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    dotsNothing New Reallydots
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    This isn't a work of art, I can promise that. This won't be something compelling and moving, but only truthful. I promise not to be fake, I promise not to stretch the facts. I concur to the notion that this is my thoughts' seppuku.

    It's just something I need to do, to write out my wants and fears...needs and realizations.

    First piece, entitled "Me For Me"

    "Let me be who I am
    What I am
    Let me look the way I am
    Let me feel the way I am
    Love me for me
    Tell me I'm beautiful
    And that's all that will matter
    For if I'm beautiful to you
    I'm beautiful to the whole world
    Love my laugh
    Cherish my smile
    Ogle my body
    Love me for me"

    Something simple, nothing overdone...just me.

    Second piece, entitled "Silly Putty"

    "Remember things for me, please.
    Stick to stuff so I don't have to.
    Be cheap, thanks.
    Make sure you're available.
    Please don't stink.
    Don't take forever to mold.
    Drying up isn't an option.
    Always be entertaining.
    And I'll keep you,
    My silly putty."

    Wow, this is retarded.




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      Also, I meant to say *NOW* to the negative... but who cares? It's a great excuse to crrect my typo and simultaneously improve my give-take ratio.
    | Posted on 2008-04-02 00:00:00 | by Flynn | [ Reply to This ]
      'Me for Me' is a good piece that is decently written and has a wholesome and well meaning message, one that alot of people need to adhere too. Especially in this day and age, and especially for women who for some reason seem to believe the only way to get a guy is to become a complete and utter skank and sell them selves for the price of a McDonald's cheeseburger, and a shake if they aren't on a diet.
    I think that alot of people will read this poem and think it prideful and self serving, and perhaps there is some pride to it but who cares? You need to be proud of yourself and love yourself before you can be proud of and love others.
    See, this piece made me rant, and was therefore good.

    Silly Putty was a touch too abstract for my grounded male sense to completely comprehend. That doesn't mean it's retarded, just means I am. Slow.

    It's great to see you writing again Hel. Great to see you back into the swing of things...

    Not to the negative criticisms. None par usual. And not because I have low standards, just because I have respect for you and your work.
    | Posted on 2008-04-02 00:00:00 | by Flynn | [ Reply to This ]


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