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    dots Submission Name: Fool a Fooldots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 265
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 472
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1675



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    dotsFool a Fooldots
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    If you donít know what you want
    Donít say you love me
    If you donít know what you want
    Donít hold me close
    If you donít know what you want
    Donít come near me
    If you donít know what you want
    Youíre a deadly rose

    You donít have time you say
    We still talk occasionally
    Thatís time best spent deciding
    Use that time more wisely
    Decide to leave or to stay

    Leave me alone
    Donít come near
    Donít touch me
    I canít take this
    Drop the phone

    Either you want this or you donít
    Itís that simple
    Figure it out
    Decide now
    Donít dig deeper while Iím prone

    I may not be happy without you
    My smile fades
    My mood dulls
    My heart aches
    But I will still live true

    This isnít what I desire
    You know this
    Iím distressed
    I canít think
    But my heart is starting to tire

    I know you arenít playing me
    Intentionally
    Your means are good
    Your heart still warm
    But you know you canít blame me

    All I want is to hold you
    Be close to you
    Like we used to
    Feel your heart beat
    You know itís overdue

    Iím not afraid you wonít come to me
    My heart tells me not to worry
    It tells me you want me
    That you need me
    But it canít confirm or guarantee

    This all came to me so suddenly
    Iím in disarray
    I think I died that day
    I hope that itís a phase
    The longer the wait the harder to breathe




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