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    dots Submission Name: Neverdots

    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 23/161/138
    Words: 444
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 580
    Average Vote:    3.0000
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    You said you loved me
    You lie
    You said I was the only
    You lie

    Why would you tell me you love me
    Why would you tell me you want me
    Why would you choose him
    Why would you silence my heart
    Iíll always love you
    Thatís the part I hate most about me

    I wish I could cut it out
    I wish I could toss it away
    I wish I could kill the pain
    The way you killed my trust
    The way you took it away

    You wanna be with him
    I wish you the best
    I hope the phrase is false
    Once a cheater always a cheater
    A lie is a lie in every language
    Do what you want to do most

    Iíll probably cry and cry
    And inside I know I will die
    But eventually I will be reborn
    Youíll be in my dreams
    But not in my life
    I can no longer take this
    That was the last time

    I donít want to find someone else
    Theyíd just be a rebound
    Iím not sinnacle
    Iím not evil
    I donít want to get with people
    To break them for myself

    You played a dirty trick
    You know how low you were
    You know you led me on
    Youíll get it back
    Youíll hurt ten fold

    Because judgement day will come
    When god asks you why
    What will you say
    You did what you want
    And you didnít think
    To you love is just a word

    Iíve felt love
    Thatís why Iím not mad
    But love is more
    Itís a lifestyle
    Itís selflessness
    Why do you do this

    Break my heart once
    Shame on you
    Break it twice
    Shame on me
    Iíve been shamed
    Iíve been broken
    I feel beat
    But Iím to blame

    I should never have taken you back
    I regret every memory we share
    I should have left you behind
    You were never really there

    Your memory to me
    Is a mere reminder
    It says to me
    Hopefully I will remember this
    Love is blind
    Now open your eyes

    Now I can see
    You never deserved me
    You didnít want to be alone
    And you acted selfishly
    And only took what you want

    One day you will want me
    You will realize
    This mistake you made
    You may cry to me and beg
    You may keep it inside and deny
    But you will see
    I would have given you the world
    Now I bid you farewell

    I have the answer
    To one of the great questions

    Itís better never to have loved at all

    Submitted on 2008-04-02 00:10:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I've been there in this exact same kind of anger, for the exact same reasons, but funny thing is that I even posted on a social network something similar to your last sentence, but with the opposite meaning: "I prefer being apart of the person I love than never to be loved at all".

    Atually when you met me, that rage was still inside me, remember? I'm glad we are both better now.
    | Posted on 2015-07-28 00:00:00 | by happymoon | [ Reply to This ]
      this piece was so full of passion and emotion, and that is a great thing. unfortunately the piece feels a bit less like a poem and a bit more like a rant.
    "sinnacle" should be "cynical" for future reference, and ten-fold is written correctly there, with the hyphen.
    While I can understand why the poem was written, and have been there myself, and probobly written a couple like it, this piece lacks a spark which takes the poem from being an alright way of getting out your feelings to an amazing masterpiece that is read and loved by millions. while I myself have yet to be loved and revered, I do think that you could use a little work here. i like that you are so close to the piece, which can greatly help with your writing, but you need to take a step back and look at this the way the rest of us do and be honest with yourself. then tear it apart and put it back together. repeat that until you are completely satisfied with the end result.
    i really hope i have not offended you, i am just trying to tell it like it is.
    best of luck

    | Posted on 2008-04-03 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]

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