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    dots Submission Name: Limitsdots
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    Author: saartha
    ASL Info:    27/F/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 230/390/136
    Words: 24
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       I was challenged to write a poem without adjectives. This is the result.


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    dotsLimitsdots
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    Bones crawl inexorably,
    writhingly reaching
    beyond the skin
    with the regretfulness
    of a glacier on the move.

    This body can't contain me
    anymore.




    Submitted on 2008-04-02 00:33:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      limits...

    I really like the idea behind this (interesting challenge)...

    the thought of bones writhingly reaching beyond skin hurts... all i can think of is compound fracture (so not pretty)...

    a regretful glacier - I like how you personify here

    I think what I like most (and of course this is subjective) is the thought of my body unable to contain me... that there is this explosion waiting or wanting to happen... that there is a certain pain to holding in... the pressure of it... the want of escape...

    I really do like your brand of minimalism... it makes one think and rearrange the norm... it is succinct and meaningful.
    | Posted on 2008-10-08 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]
      It really is quite frustrating when you are put in a certain situation and your really not up to it. I've been through that before - I wanted to write something so bad but for some reason, I just can't capture the right words. Some say that it's writer's block while others say that the only reason why people get writer's block is because those people don't have a rich vocabulary. But whatever the reason is, sometimes, it just doesn't matter, you just want to explode; have that feeling shatter to pieces with the rest of you.

    Anyway, your brand of minimalism is like a firecracker. It's small (well usually it is) but it packs quite a punch. It's like an uncontrollable retaliation as a result of a momentary lack of pretense.

    And the mere fact that you captured that just shows your skill.

    Pretty good.
    | Posted on 2008-04-02 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]
      This body can't contain me
    anymore.

    I like it !!!
    | Posted on 2008-04-02 00:00:00 | by Dying Young | [ Reply to This ]


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