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    dots Submission Name: Nothing But A Fooldots
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    Author: juss_kriss
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 404/445/126
    Words: 282
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Trapped
    Total Views: 1004
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1954



    Description:
       basically these lyrics are about letting an ex control your life, and giving them what they want because they're so good at manipulating you into it. but, eventually you realize exactly what it is, and are learning to break from it.


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    dotsNothing But A Fooldots
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    verse 1:
    i'm slowly loosening the cloth
    you used to wrap around my mouth
    and choke back the words
    i've been longing to say
    your time is slipping away
    i'm not so sorry to say
    cause i'm sick of seeing you
    up on that fake pedestal
    you don't deserve the recognition
    their applause or my affection

    pre-chorus:
    she can keep you
    if she really wants
    but chances are
    she'll throw you away too
    once your secrets' out,
    yeah everyone knows the one
    that i'm talking about

    chorus:
    you're a cheater, a player
    an all around lets fuck you over
    you'll kiss her hello
    only to fuck some other girl
    and then say goodbye to one
    once you're done having your fun
    you're a cheater, a heart beater
    nothing more than a fool i used to love

    verse 2:
    i'm slowly strengthening these walls
    you broke down over all the years
    i won't let you in
    you can't break me again
    your strength is fading away
    i'm not so sorry to say
    cause i'm sick of your control
    you forget i'm not your girl
    you gave that up a long time ago
    so move on, walk away, goodbye

    bridge:
    you're nothing but a fool
    a fool i used to love
    now a cheater, a heart beater
    haven't you played me enough
    i let you take control
    now you're fucking me
    while dating some other girl
    you're nothing but a fool

    coda:
    i'm slowly loosening the cloth
    you used to wrap around my mouth
    and choke back the words
    i've been longing to say
    you're a cheater, a heart beater
    nothing but a fool




    Submitted on 2008-04-02 02:31:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      GREAT write Kriss! I can completely relate. THe rythme is awsome, the wording amazing, and all around great peice. The emotion is so freakin strong it's like a slap in the face. Another of your lyrics I would absolutly love to hear in full song. THis is so intense. Great write. Keep it up!

    Sarah
    | Posted on 2008-04-08 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]
      HO. LY. SHIT. that was bleeding brilliant. i wanted to kick the [censored] out of that asswipe and i don't even know him!! way to make the reader feel your anger. i really liked it and i wish i could hear it because it sounds like one hell of a song. way to use the lying peice of [censored] who used you.

    i tip my hat and bid thee farewell.
    | Posted on 2008-04-04 00:00:00 | by PoeticNonsense | [ Reply to This ]


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