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    dots Submission Name: hey djdots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 359
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 372



    Description:
       yeah, i did see him cry but it was after he got jumped and someone stole his dog. i wish i could have made it better, made some of the pain leave, and maybe i did comfort him a little. i would have hoped so. idk. gotta love him


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    dotshey djdots
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    hey dj, you make my world twirl round
    im lost and found
    we're rising from the ground
    and though my spinning wheel is broken
    all the words we'll leave unspoken
    will only help me to open,
    up my eyes
    i watched you cry
    i watched you want to die
    dont lie
    we'll fly
    together in the sky




    Submitted on 2008-04-02 13:51:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It was ok but I didn't really get the true sense of it and you could have wrote a little more to discribe your true feeling of the poem but none the less it was good. sorry if I come too hard.

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