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    dots Submission Name: World Without Wisdomdots

    Author: Diablo Tapitio
    ASL Info:    30
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 85/111/62
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsWorld Without Wisdomdots

    I am looking for wisdom in a world of silence,
    looking for logic in this world full of violence,
    I've been looking for a harmony in this world at war,
    I just cant figure out what all the fighting is for.

    I look at the broken toys,and think of everything i've lost,
    And shiver as I se T.V images of the holocost,
    I still dont know what all this fighting is for,
    so Ilook inside and try to see the core.

    listen close to the words of this witch,
    heal te wounds with a stitch,
    hold your head high when theese days get black,
    and dont let your children fall through the cracks.

    I am Looking for awnsers,
    I am tired of the cold,
    I pray to this cow,
    I just made out of gold.

    Submitted on 2008-04-02 18:02:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Really paints a vivid picture, you're obviously a very good abstract writer, I'll be looking forward to your next writing, You have great structure and it all moves very nicely, Thanks for sharing this was an awesome poem I have a lot of love for you,

    Wouldnt change a thing!
    | Posted on 2008-04-03 00:00:00 | by Fallyn Angel | [ Reply to This ]

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