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    dots Submission Name: A Midsummer Night's Dreamdots
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    Author: Savannah Cullen
    Elite Ratio:    1.66 - 9/37/48
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dotsA Midsummer Night's Dreamdots
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    I lay in my bed
    Exhausted
    Nearly too tired to move
    Yet my eyes won't close
    Wide open
    Darting about the room
    Observing useless things
    Unknown details
    Different shades in a paintings eye
    How the window shows
    A midnight blue sky
    With a beautiful moon
    And stars
    As plentiful as the sea
    Small
    Singular points
    Yet each a point
    On their own
    A singular point of reason
    But together
    A beautious sight
    Worthy of Shakespeare's
    Wonderful observation
    Thoughts begin to overwhelm me
    And my eyes begin to droop closed
    Though I can no longer see
    My mind creates beautiful prose
    I sigh and fall into deep slumber
    A small smile plastered to my face
    My thoughts free
    As free as a fish in the sea
    Created just for me
    What a wonder
    What power
    All caused by
    A midsummer nights dream.




    Submitted on 2008-04-02 18:43:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I always hate to say this for fear of sound like a complete idiot....anyway I llike the imagery of this piece and I think the poem itself was pretty much based around it. I really love finding poems like this and id love too see a lot more on this site, so well done. I think its alright to give compliments sometimes



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