Those moments

Author: rachel gless ASL Info:    23/f/mx Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 68 /89 /37 Words: 98

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Those moments

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Those moments Those moments That make you want to cry Those moments Paint colors on your eyes Those moments The ones you cherish most Those moments You hold when you’re alone Those moments Were made by you and me Those moments Are always in my dreams Those moments The sweetest of my life Those moments Have built on me a smile Those moments Brought me a happy tear Those moments Will never disappear Those moments Have made what we are now Those moments Will be always in my mind

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This is sweet and simple and very lyrical. I think that you did splendidly here, but then I am big on the whole nostalgia thing. Very well written and elegantly constructed. -blu

| Posted on 2008-04-03 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]

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