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Those moments


Author: rachel gless
ASL Info:    23/f/mx
Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 68 /89 /37
Words: 98
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Just a thought I had when I heard a song tht reminded me of a very special mement


Those moments



Those moments

Those moments
That make you want to cry
Those moments
Paint colors on your eyes

Those moments
The ones you cherish most
Those moments
You hold when you’re alone

Those moments
Were made by you and me
Those moments
Are always in my dreams

Those moments
The sweetest of my life
Those moments
Have built on me a smile

Those moments
Brought me a happy tear
Those moments
Will never disappear

Those moments
Have made what we are now
Those moments
Will be always in my mind




Submitted on 2008-04-02 21:03:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is sweet and simple and very lyrical. I think that you did splendidly here, but then I am big on the whole nostalgia thing. Very well written and elegantly constructed.

-blu
| Posted on 2008-04-03 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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