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    dots Submission Name: Love is like...dots
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    Author: bloody_raven
    ASL Info:    17/Girl/Stupid U.S
    Elite Ratio:    2.08 - 13/44/28
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 714
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    dotsLove is like...dots
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    Love is like a river.
    It will cut a new path
    whenever it meets an obstacle.
    Love is like a mountain.
    Hard to climb, but once
    you get to the top,
    the view is beautiful.
    Love is like a piece of art work.
    Even the smallest bit
    can be so beautiful.
    Love is a symbol of eternity,
    that wipes away all sense of time.
    Removing all memory of a
    beginning and all fear of an end.




    Submitted on 2008-04-03 08:16:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      still love this one.
    | Posted on 2009-03-08 00:00:00 | by SonOfDamascus | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey this was really really good. It was very artistic, and i loved it! So good!
    | Posted on 2008-04-09 00:00:00 | by Aangskate | [ Reply to This ]
      I did likethis one,But I feel like maybe this should have been two seperate poems,the first half was wonderful,I love the comparison of love to something that is as powerful as it is buetiful,like a river is,now i didnt care for the last few lines,I feel like you lost the individual emotion and ended it withI can never get enough of you,I dont know maybe its just me but it seems forced,however I did enjoy it.
    very romantic
    | Posted on 2008-04-08 00:00:00 | by Diablo Tapitio | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the first 14 lines of your work. But,
    I think the 15th line should read,
    (Love has arms that will hold you
    at your weakest.) and so on with
    the Eyes. Your refrane " Love is Like" is a good one. But after the 14th line it reads like a diffrent poem. But it is a good poem Just make that one change. and it will be a great poem.
    I have a poem called (If Love Were A Fight) when I first posted it I took a major hit. I made the changes and now its on peoples Fav's list.
    and No I'm not Bragging. Poem start out good,
    but revision makes them great!

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2008-04-03 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah, soooo very roooomantic! Many, many lovely and wonderful comparisons in this fine poem... loved it a ton... bravo... bravo... bravo...
    | Posted on 2008-04-03 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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