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    dots Submission Name: Open Heart Surgery (Bleeding Love)dots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 243
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       written to the beat of and inspired by the song by Leona Lewis "Bleeding Love"


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    Here it comes now,
    The near fatal blow,
    My arteries start to squeeze
    Red to the snow,
    It's a December,
    White and I'm broken...
    That time of year,
    Where Love's unspoken
    Thoughts from the heart,
    Hurt like birth,
    I try to speak up
    So my words are first
    Heartache--
    I forget the verse,
    Where’s my heart at?
    Who'd expect the worse?
    Should we,
    Request the nurse?
    Should I try to push through,
    And forget it hurts?
    How? If the machine,
    Ain't beeping,
    Line silence hits the room,
    Watching the screen and leaking,
    Will I pull through,
    Will I not?
    I'm standing outside of me,
    Watching the clock

    You open up my heart,
    All they see is me bleed,

    Here it comes now,
    The near fatal blow,
    My arteries start to squeeze
    Red to the snow,
    I revisit,
    The moment in my mind,
    A light shines bright,
    Rendering me blind,
    God? No, Heaven?
    Yes, cause it's you,
    Your warmness,
    And your blade pull me through,

    You my open my heart,
    All they see is me bleed,
    Thus they tear us apart,
    Though your all that i need,

    They don’t know it yet,
    But that was a mistake,
    Because now all the smiles,
    Are facade and the laughs are fake,

    Here it comes now,
    The near fatal blow,
    My arteries start to squeeze,
    Red to the snow,
    It's December
    White and I'm broken...




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      This was awesome! It had an eerie feel at the beginning, with the image of death, translucence(? is that the right word) of the body and the white December.

    And then it goes into this image of controlling the situation; the forces of the universe? fate?

    The chorus was really great...and as usual, teh rhythm made the whole thing so much better!
    | Posted on 2008-04-18 00:00:00 | by TheStillSilence | [ Reply to This ]
      Creepy, yet Romantic.
    My first impressions anyhow. Actually it reminded me a lot of the movie Awake, I just watched it a few hours ago.

    It kinda seems like a spiritual piece to me, like in your third paragraph talking of warmness, Being close to god obviously.

    I also got the feeling of your trying to pull through the pain to live and be with the one you love, but you also feel a side of you that wants to be in heaven, as your feeling this preceding warmth of god.
    Maybe im wrong, but those are just my thoughts.

    I really like this actually, I think I will add it.
    :)
    | Posted on 2008-04-05 00:00:00 | by DiamondTears | [ Reply to This ]


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