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    dots Submission Name: Cut and Maim, the Aim's Demented prt 1dots

    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       intended to be sort of a dedication to all the people in prison who are wrongfully there, especially lack, notthat they are the only ones. just the majority, because of bias, it happens in every race, believe it or not there are alot of people who don't belong in there men and women. Yes the ending is abrupt. I know

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    dotsCut and Maim, the Aim's Demented prt 1dots

    Force fed throught the tube,
    Of red,
    My heart stumbles, unless
    The truth is bled,
    Spilled like it kill me,
    lay down-- yeah you feel me,
    The hard part in the mirror,
    Is to find the real me
    Unless you want a noose,
    Or crucifix to pick or choose to loose,
    You better zip it, and swig booze,
    Or just choose to move...
    Truth is rich biz get this,
    slickness about' em,
    so beat it when he shift his weight,
    His witness sticks in this "cloudness",
    Fouless--- guilless---,
    It's the new talk,
    A century in a petentary
    With spies that soon stalk,
    A colored man has no chance-
    Though I don't like that card,
    it's the one I've been given.
    just that-- hard
    My skin is my "character"
    I play the role,
    Of your excpectations,
    versuses my soul,
    It's stereotypical and ironnical
    In the same sentence,
    Come read the chronicles,
    Of "Cut and Maim, the Aim's Demented"
    Blame him, it's not me-
    I'm just another dude,
    Random-- in pandamonium,
    I'd prefer, to be in Clue,
    I either did it or not,
    You can't choose the two,
    The bodies got bruises,
    So? You do to-
    I do too,
    Should've got IDT,
    And we all know the racists,
    Would I.D. Me.

    Submitted on 2008-04-03 13:37:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the first 5 lines; they could say so much. Wat I got was: the subject is being forced into the stereotype, being framed. Yet in the evidence that convicts them lies to truth, which is being ignored on purpose.

    As usual, I love ur flow =]

    The pint you're portraying here is very interesting, and I thought you did a great job of it!
    | Posted on 2008-04-18 00:00:00 | by TheStillSilence | [ Reply to This ]

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