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    dots Submission Name: The Picture Smiles Back dots
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    Author: amrslamr
    Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 18/18/16
    Words: 420
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       learning about myself. Seeing him again. He thought I'd told him not to call me anymore, and was honoring that. lol. It's all good. But glad I went through the process. Got good lessons out of some hurtful thought processes.


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    THE PICTURE SMILES BACK
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    Amr

    I shout at your picture, I trusted you!
    As my anger takes over my pain.
    Im not gonna cry over someone like you!
    But the tears start to fall once again.

    You told me youd see me tomorrow,
    But that was now five days ago.
    I havent heard anything from you
    And Im starting to think that I wont.

    I cant believe how bad it hurts me
    To know you could leave me so fast.
    Did you already know as you left me
    That the last time we had was our last?

    Was it something I said? Was it something you did?
    Did I miss something I shouldve seen?
    I trusted you Jonathan, I really did.
    I at least thought youd say bye to me.

    But after Ive had time to re-think things
    Im starting to see I was wrong.
    I said that I trusted you, and I still do.
    It was ME who messed up, all along.

    I was trusting you to be like someone youre not,
    To behave like your nature forbids.
    Id better off trust that a giant oak tree
    Could behave like a buttercup did.

    What an idiot girlfriend I have been for you.
    I was doing the whole thing for me!
    Every kindness I showed you, each thing that Id do
    Was to make you beholden to me.

    I was buying your love like a prostitute deal,
    "Heres some coffee, so now love me Jon."
    And I then have the nerve to point fingers at YOU.
    Its no wonder to me that youre gone.

    So now Ill find out if I really loved you
    By the way that I act with you gone.
    If Im really grown up then I wouldnt want you
    To be here when you want to move on.

    If I ever get lucky and see you again
    I will tell you Im okay you left,
    Im just glad that you stayed for as long as you did
    And gave me so much of yourself.

    I say to your picture, I do still trust you!
    And the picture just smiles back at me.
    I will trust you enough to let you just be you,
    Not someone I need you to be.




    Submitted on 2008-04-03 22:51:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      GRRR. you dsould decide either to rhyme or not. you know, but it definitely is something recognizable, the feel ing is very similar to something I've delt with for a while. but anywho, the visual rhyme is a grreat twist, you real don't see that too much anymore so i'm glad you brought that back.
    AETLP/TC
    | Posted on 2008-04-04 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ]


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