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    dots Submission Name: A Gift For You From My Heart.dots
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    Author: xXCptn_SephyXx
    ASL Info:    22/f/PA
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 46/119/104
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 765
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 249



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    dotsA Gift For You From My Heart.dots
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    A rose is not a thing—
    But a considerate symbol;
    It is not cantankerous.
    Nor mellow.
    A rose is composed of a system—
    Molded with the emotion
    That falls safely from the eyes
    And fill the heart.




    Submitted on 2008-04-04 10:39:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      To be honest I read this a while ago and was like "wah?" But now I get it. lol. I like your concept of taking the rose as a symbol for emotion.
    I had a problem with you using "mellow." I don't know why, but the word just sticks out like a sore thumb. Maybe use an adjective of it. Carefree? Complaisant?
    | Posted on 2008-04-14 00:00:00 | by lovedeathsdeath | [ Reply to This ]


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