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A Gift For You From My Heart.


Author: xXCptn_SephyXx
ASL Info:    22/f/PA
Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 46 /119 /104
Words: 38
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Average Vote:    3.0000
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A Gift For You From My Heart.


A rose is not a thing—
But a considerate symbol;
It is not cantankerous.
Nor mellow.
A rose is composed of a system—
Molded with the emotion
That falls safely from the eyes
And fill the heart.




Submitted on 2008-04-04 10:39:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  To be honest I read this a while ago and was like "wah?" But now I get it. lol. I like your concept of taking the rose as a symbol for emotion.
I had a problem with you using "mellow." I don't know why, but the word just sticks out like a sore thumb. Maybe use an adjective of it. Carefree? Complaisant?
| Posted on 2008-04-14 00:00:00 | by lovedeathsdeath | [ Reply to This ]


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