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    dots Submission Name: Destroy the Beastdots
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    Author: insanegemini
    ASL Info:    18/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.33 - 24/50/56
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsDestroy the Beastdots
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    Bleeding
    Hurting
    Crying
    All for different reasons
    Yet intertwined

    I bleed
    Cuz razors are sharp
    Cuz of low self esteem
    Cuz of a twisted mind

    I hurt
    Cuz of the ďhe(s)Ē
    The one I love
    The one that should love me
    And the one that I donít want

    I cry
    I donít know why
    It could be because
    My body drips blood
    And I caused it

    Or maybe because
    My heart is shattered
    And I canít fix it

    But really
    I cry
    Because that is what is left to do
    Because I can release the beast
    Eating my soul
    By drowning it with
    My salty tears

    Drown it to stop
    The bleeding
    Hurting
    And crying

    To bad it is immune
    To my sorrow






    Submitted on 2008-04-04 11:54:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is good. the feelings are strong, could have been a bit more explanitory, but i understand because mine are like this too sometimes. i really liked some of the slant rhymes you used too. good write!
    | Posted on 2008-04-04 00:00:00 | by Aangskate | [ Reply to This ]


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