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    dots Submission Name: Preacher Mandots
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    Author: Imadjinn
    ASL Info:    17/M/Neverwhere
    Elite Ratio:    4.27 - 340/348/146
    Words: 251
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 831
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    Bytes: 1535



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       A sweet write by my friend Amanda McCartney

    Tell her... and me... what you think


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    dotsPreacher Mandots
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    We've been sharing these walks for a while.
    Been walking in the darkness, sharing thoughts that make us smile.
    And there's so much I want to say,
    But I can't find the words, and I'm sure you know them anyway.

    Preacher Man, I want to thank you
    For making these walks brighter and my heart so much lighter.
    Preacher Man, I wish I could make you
    Understand that I don't want to go,
    But the time is coming soon, and I want you to know
    That the nights will be much darker without you here at my side,
    And I know you see much more than what I'm keeping inside.
    Preacher Man, I'll always think of you.
    Preacher Man... Preacher Man...

    I love every minute that we've spent
    Walking through the darkness hardly caring where we went.
    There's so much I want to tell you
    But you already know, you already see right through.

    Preacher Man, I wish I could stay.
    I wish I didn't have to go, and we could always be this way.
    Preacher Man, I wish I could make you
    Understand that I don't want to go,
    But the time is coming soon and I want you to know
    That the night will be much darker without you here at my side,
    And I know you see much more than what I'm keeping inside.
    If only I could see if you're doing the same.
    Preacher Man... Preacher Man...

    I wish I knew your name.




    Submitted on 2008-04-04 16:51:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this was interesting.

    it hit home. i like the way that it allowed you, almost forced you , to feel a strong connection between the narartor and 'preacher man'. but at the end it forces you to doubt what you thought. 'i wish i knew your name'
    that makes you wonder what kind of relationship they had here. and how long it lasted.

    very nice write. maybe try not to FORCE the rhyming. i like poems that rhyme but no poem should be forced into a meater.

    :)

    much love

    :)

    ~annie
    | Posted on 2008-04-05 00:00:00 | by annie smith | [ Reply to This ]


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