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    dots Submission Name: Unrealistic Expectations (Bitter Disappointment)dots
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    Author: lebeauvide
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       I wanted him to be something that he isn't...


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    dotsUnrealistic Expectations (Bitter Disappointment)dots
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    You are the trap in which I lie
    And the burden I must bear
    I tried so hard for so many things
    Just to wake without you there

    I can see clearly now...
    The cataracts have been banished
    The clouds that used to shelter me
    Have all but up and vanished

    I can feel you for what you really are-
    No more than skin and bones
    I had built you up to be so much more...
    But a woman can't live on a man alone.

    I tried to make you everything
    I thought that you should be
    I wanted you to be so perfect
    Instead, I made you ugly

    You're nothing but a man,
    Much to my disappointment...
    I guess it was fun while it lasted...
    I know that I enjoyed it.




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      I believe that everyone, at one time or another, sees what they want to see in someone else. They find that person who isnt really a person to them, but an icon, a thing of such beauty and perfection that they are placed high on a pedastil. The problem is, eventually the fact that they really are just a person will shine thorugh, and the grief that follows the loss of that fantasy can kill the relationship. Sometimes, this is better because the real person isnt a very good one. Other times, what might have been a wonderful relationship is sacrificed. We all do this, whether it is fair or not.

    I think your poem sums this phenomenon up rather nicely. I particularly like that it is matter of fact, and does not come across as being bitter. The fact that you say in the end that you had enjoyed it while it lasted is wonderful. It shows that though he is "just a man", you can still look on the relationship in a posative light, which says a great deal about your character.

    Good write, keep it up.
    | Posted on 2008-04-04 00:00:00 | by ebflannery | [ Reply to This ]


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