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    dots Submission Name: Acceptance?dots
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    Author: PierceMySoul
    Elite Ratio:    4.93 - 17/28/12
    Words: 216
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Friendship
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    dotsAcceptance?dots
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    In the beginning everyone is in the same place together yet at the same time all alone. No one knows one another. They all share a common desire to want to meet each other yet there is a fear of rejection. A fear that you wont be accepted, that what comes out of your mouth wont be taken seriously. Some overcome their fears quickly and form "the group". the group that has one of the others looking in from the outside trying to find the entrance where a spark with "the group" will be made. This person thinks they finally find that one thing that will be their entrance. They go for it with high expectations. In this person's mind it is a good thing...a worthy thing. With weak force and fearful heart an attempt is made. NO AVAIL. "The group" only mocks and makes jokes. As they laugh the person walks away to the comfort of silence. Yet in this comfort only deeper pain is found. Why must this be so? The group has no idea how much is felt by the lone person. The are oblivious and the person only wishes they could feel what her heart feels. Maybe one day the fear will be overcome. But for now solitude is her only solace.




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