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    dots Submission Name: Point of Youdots

    Author: Ceyx
    Elite Ratio:    5.69 - 111/107/81
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Average Vote:    2.5000
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    dotsPoint of Youdots

    You were so dynamic in your introspection
    -With a propensity for pushing through your mirror
    Tactless with your delusions of perfection
    -All logic tends to be lost on you anymore

    Serendipitously discovered you're not what I thought I was looking for...
    -You'd pose, statuesque, as if beyond reproach
    Only in a reflected world would you be misconstrued as genuine
    -Using confused eyes and looking-glass lies to encroach

    Beware gifts given by the mad, and what lies within
    And beware the machinations of the never-when

    Don't talk to strange animals if you wish to proceed
    Sit quietly and ride the train to where it may lead...


    Submitted on 2008-04-04 23:04:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oh alice. she came back and was never the same. oh alice she was such a [censored] we loved her so.

    you let me feel her break my heart. so subtle than the tears where afraid to fall. you kept them there poised on the edge of absolution, the verge of insubstantial commitment.

    | Posted on 2009-02-05 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      the framing of the poem and content tend to point towards some one who is superficial, vain, etc. and how you recognize him/her as such. the introduction a nd core of teh piece is strong. the last couplet is confusing though. im not sure what animals and trains have to do with this poem.
    | Posted on 2008-04-04 00:00:00 | by SincerWritinAsh | [ Reply to This ]

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