Point of You by Ceyx

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Submission Name: Point of You dots

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Author:	Ceyx
Elite Ratio:	5.69 - 111/107/81
Words:	122

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
Total Views:	1139
Average Vote:	2.5000
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Point of You dots

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You were so dynamic in your introspection
-With a propensity for pushing through your mirror
Tactless with your delusions of perfection
-All logic tends to be lost on you anymore

Serendipitously discovered you're not what I thought I was looking for...
-You'd pose, statuesque, as if beyond reproach
Only in a reflected world would you be misconstrued as genuine
-Using confused eyes and looking-glass lies to encroach

Beware gifts given by the mad, and what lies within
And beware the machinations of the never-when

Don't talk to strange animals if you wish to proceed
Sit quietly and ride the train to where it may lead...

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Submitted on 2008-04-04 23:04:23 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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oh alice. she came back and was never the same. oh alice she was such a [censored] we loved her so.

you let me feel her break my heart. so subtle than the tears where afraid to fall. you kept them there poised on the edge of absolution, the verge of insubstantial commitment.

~shadow
| Posted on 2009-02-05 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
the framing of the poem and content tend to point towards some one who is superficial, vain, etc. and how you recognize him/her as such. the introduction a nd core of teh piece is strong. the last couplet is confusing though. im not sure what animals and trains have to do with this poem.
| Posted on 2008-04-04 00:00:00 | by SincerWritinAsh | [ Reply to This ]

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