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Wonderland Reality

Author: DiamondTears
ASL Info:    20/F/Wa
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 66 /109 /57
Words: 91
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Wonderland Reality

Alice has fallen down again
Breaking limb,
Acid swirls delicately
Through her spindly circuit of veins
Rabbits red eye,
Twitched like the ticking of seconds.
Bombs breaking earth above.
Cant seem to hear their devastation
Preoccupation of dinner parties,
And falling stars…
Rather dwindle in the sapphire sparkle
Of a maddened mind.
Forget the practicality
Make room for the pleasant nonsense
To block out the darkness
Your clandestine of realities,
Locked in a box.
While dreams run array through the twilight,
Reality knocks, and knocks, eternally in the box.

Submitted on 2008-04-05 08:02:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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