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    dots Submission Name: Coitus Interruptusdots
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    Author: jkhutchings
    Elite Ratio:    1.18 - 3/8/26
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsCoitus Interruptusdots
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    open for me
    as a flower
    the soft petals
    of your womanhood
    wide in the
    morning sun
    touch my stamen
    to your pistil
    intertwine these
    vines of passion
    in the fragrant
    musk of sin
    let us shake
    the dew from
    our leaves in
    blissful harmony
    and later close
    like new buds
    in the starlit night........
    suddenly awake
    I realise that
    I fall in love
    with every
    pretty face
    that smiles
    at me being
    the sad story
    I am......




    Submitted on 2008-04-05 19:44:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this. I've never heard a poem of this subject in the way you did it. The end surprised me. I was expecting something more, lovey, I guess. It was a nice turn. I really like it.
    | Posted on 2008-04-07 00:00:00 | by BestxDeceptions | [ Reply to This ]


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