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    dots Submission Name: Apples And Atrophydots
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    Author: SonOfDamascus
    ASL Info:    18/m/Maine
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 27/35/37
    Words: 238
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 648
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 1773



    Description:
       Yeah, I Just Wrote This Like 4 Minutes Before I Posted It.

    Its Kinda Lyrical To Me.
    I Don't Know Why.


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    dotsApples And Atrophydots
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    Im Tired.

    Of Alot.

    People's Bitterness,
    Mine as Well.

    This Constant Turmoil,
    Its Different From Before.

    Ignorance Is Bliss.
    The Less You Know The Better Life Is.

    Curiosity Kills The Cat.
    Harmony Caught In The Crossfire.

    Sleep Deprivation.
    Caused By Distance.


    Lyrics Carry Thoughts With Them.
    Thoughts Of A Lesser Tomorrow.

    Titles Are Hard To Deal With.
    Like A Drinking Problem.

    Im An Alcoholic,
    Addicted To The Wine Of Love.

    I Think I Get Enough.
    But It Turns Out I Never Do.

    I Miss The Apples Of Joy.
    That Every Word Brought.

    But Like A Unused Limb,
    Words Have Atrophied.

    Actions Being All Thats Left.
    But Distance Prevents It.

    A Long Held Hug,
    Is Well Overdue.

    Different Than The Bitter View.
    That The Mirror Shows Me.

    Reflected Light
    Shines True.

    Further Into Your Soul,
    Than You'd Ever Want It To.

    I Don't Want To End Up,
    Acting 84.
    When Im Only 17.

    Love Ages You Faster,
    Than What Is Healthy.
    For Mind, Body And Soul.

    To Be Held.
    Is To Be Healed.

    Rejuvenated.
    Brought Back From The Dead.

    Reincarnation Separates Lovers.
    As Do Many Miles.

    Maybe I'll Know Closeness.
    In Another Life.

    So I Contemplate The Meaning Of.
    Apples And Atrophy.

    And Hope That One Day,
    You Will Be Here With Me.




    Submitted on 2008-04-05 22:08:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I love the title and the many analogies used. I especially loved the missing the apples of joy. Very nice. I like the title as well. Too true. Makes me feel like your writing about a [censored]in writers block, much like mine. Anyways, I very much liked the read.
    | Posted on 2008-04-07 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]


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