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    dots Submission Name: "okay. =)"dots
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    Author: Maverique
    ASL Info:    25/F/Own little world
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 438/478/128
    Words: 54
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 724
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 465



    Description:
       Bad break-up poem alert.


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    dots"okay. =)"dots
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    "okay. "
    such an elegant, eloquent eulogy
    from you, darling
    except this is no praise.
    except this is the sum total
    of what I mean to you,
    the summary, the conclusion
    of seven months.
    pray, tell:
    whoever says break-ups aren't happy endings?
    they should just look at your smile, darling.





    Submitted on 2008-04-06 09:15:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked it, I could feel your emotions in the writing, persay. I know that it sounds wierd, but it's true, I especially like the last line, it really pulled it all together.
    | Posted on 2008-04-06 00:00:00 | by Savannah Cullen | [ Reply to This ]


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