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    dots Submission Name: Idiocy 2dots
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    Author: Savannah Cullen
    Elite Ratio:    1.66 - 9/37/48
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    Bytes: 1154



    Description:
       A more angsty version of Idiocy


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    dotsIdiocy 2dots
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    What do you do
    When everything you hold dear
    Is stolen from you
    Forcefully
    Dragging you tooth and nail
    Away from happiness
    You fight hard as you can
    To no avail
    Nothing changes
    And you are forced
    Back
    Into the abyss
    Of loneliness
    Sadness
    A world you left
    So very long ago
    But now
    You are forced to return
    And your anger pulses
    Drowning you
    So all you can see
    Are the problems with everyone
    Except yourself
    A wonderful view
    Is it not
    Death
    Destruction
    Despair
    But all you can do
    Is keep fighting
    'Till everything is gone
    Useless
    Yet unstoppable
    It's all a war before long
    And as your anger subsides
    The war rages on
    Chaos
    No one to guide the armies
    Fighting for what once was
    Your cause
    You watch silently
    As they kill eachother
    Until it's only you
    And you have no choice
    But to walk away
    And forever carry the guilt with you




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