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    dots Submission Name: The Open Doordots

    Author: hybridsongwrite
    ASL Info:    20 / M / MN, USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 185/163/68
    Words: 279
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    dotsThe Open Doordots

    Open up the doors and maybe then you'll find
    Blood on the wrists of a friend you left behind
    Was it worth that much, was it really worth a life
    Knowing it was you that drove him to die

    How did he look when you saw him last week
    When he told you that he loved you, and he kissed your cheek
    Was it really so hard to find a word of speech
    To help him to cope with his insecurities?


    So much has changed since you went away
    There was the suicide of, oh, what's-his-name
    In the note he wrote that you were to blame
    The witnesses said that he even said your name
    When he put the knife straight up to his neck
    When he looked at them and took a deep breath
    Then he took his life without a second guess
    And later, they found your name tattooed on his chest


    You juvenile delinquent, you worthless hypocrite
    It's all because of you, you motherf*cking b*tch
    That it has all come down to ending up like this
    So listen up close now, here's where the punchline is
    The reason is you, and the victim is me
    And all of this occurred inside a dream
    I wanted it so much, that it felt like a need
    To make you feel my pain and my misery

    Open up the doors and maybe then you'll find
    There's more to this than what first meets the eye
    Was it worth that much, did you really want a life
    Well take it then, you b*tch, you can have mine

    Submitted on 2008-04-06 16:04:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      'The reason is you, and the victim is me
    And all of this occurred inside a dream
    I wanted it so much, that it felt like a need
    To make you feel my pain and my misery'

    WOW!!! I love this right now I love it all I truely do! I know I don't know you very well and I've only read a few of your post nevertheless you have some real talent

    "I wanted it so much, that it felt like a need"

    That is so deep I know the feeling yet never could put it into just the right words to come across the way you have done here!!
    The ending was whoooaa blew me away I liked being slightly taken back by my thoughts like oh wait you are this person and it was only a dream yet seemed so real...

    this is so amazingly great its CRAZY

    | Posted on 2010-07-23 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh my god.
    I absolutely adore this. I love it so much I cant explain it.
    The only thing I could even find was
    "You juvenile delinquent, your worthless hypocrite"
    should it be
    "You juvenile delinquent, you worthless hypocrite"

    Other than that im in love with this

    I love the topic but not only that, you wrote it all so well.
    Def a fav

    | Posted on 2008-04-11 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
      The name of an awesome album by Evanescence is The Open Door

    Ill comment more on this later cuz I have to go, but I will :)

    | Posted on 2008-04-11 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
      Well I've never written or read a 3 versed song before but this one was pretty good. I especially like the chorus. Finally I know how it feels reading a song without music. Good write, i guess people still check their mail cuz you came up with two songs in no time. PS..... Can you help me with the other song though, i dont really know what sorta beat I must sing or read it to thats why i didnt comment, just leave me a tutorial or something.

    | Posted on 2008-04-09 00:00:00 | by b_v_grant | [ Reply to This ]

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