Cumbersome by lolavie

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Submission Name: Cumbersome dots

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Author:	lolavie
ASL Info:	23/female/Michigan
Elite Ratio:	3.28 - 70/172/100
Words:	41

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
Total Views:	70
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	297

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Cumbersome dots

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With feelings so cumbersome
I feel like I'm under
some pressure
the thunder inside of me's fading along with
my compusure

all the while i'm wonderin'
how you'd put me under your spell
i cant tell..

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