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    dots Submission Name: The mirrordots
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    Author: girly101
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 292/310/149
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsThe mirrordots
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    When I looked into your eyes
    I saw through to your soul
    I saw the scarlet tears
    The happiness never whole.

    Your fake smiles
    that hid your cries
    the dark soul
    masked by bright lies

    When I looked into your eyes
    I saw the hate
    I saw the anger
    The exceptence of this fate

    Your hope long dwindled away
    Pesimistically so
    You turned away from the light
    It was to hard to follow

    Then I smashed the mirror.




    Submitted on 2008-04-06 19:54:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is something I can personally identify with and it speaks to me deeply. It seems to draw on the same metaphor used by The Who in "Tommy" where the boy is completely introspective his entire life until the mirror is smashed. The difference being that external events drove him inward where as your poem indicates internal turmoil of a sort that one must face alone. This represents a snapshot of the human condition that the daytime television and American Idol crowd will never have the depth of character to grasp.
    | Posted on 2008-04-20 00:00:00 | by Immortalis | [ Reply to This ]
      ok honesty here ---> I thought it was about another person first time through.
    i got it the second time that it was the reflection being described and the reflection in the mirror was yourself, not just physical but as a whole person.
    This poem definitely reminded me of the story "The Portrait of Dorian Gray"
    I just have to ask why is the mirror called "lieing" if it is showing the true self of the speaker?
    -taylor
    | Posted on 2008-04-07 00:00:00 | by titan | [ Reply to This ]
      In a mirror, we see a vision
    Of this holding cell, our own prison
    Where there is no escape, and there is no key
    Just a sad state of affairs to be reminded of constantly.
    This image is life, a reflection of joy, and regrets
    Where there is no price to pay, but an eternal debt
    Some days we laugh, some days we cry
    But this is a reflection of where you've been and what you've done staring you in the eyes.

    I hope you like that bit. It's more of a reflection off of your piece. Generally i do not get inspirations from pieces on here, but i liked this. Alot.
    | Posted on 2008-04-07 00:00:00 | by hybridsongwrite | [ Reply to This ]
      it's awesome love , sorry for not getting it the first time , now that I do , I love it
    | Posted on 2008-04-07 00:00:00 | by Squall Leon Hea | [ Reply to This ]


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