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    dots Submission Name: sweet valentinedots
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    Author: brokenbylove
    ASL Info:    23/m/australia
    Elite Ratio:    1.37 - 62/250/224
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 157
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    dotssweet valentinedots
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    i look at the gun in my hand
    my body is shaking, my heart is quaking
    i shot you dead with a bullet to the head
    we decided to end it this way
    to leave the world together
    so we always be together forever
    your body lies on the floor
    blood all around you
    tears sting my eyes as i start to realise
    this is it this is the end
    i think of you and close my eyes
    with a single shot between my eyes
    i fall to the ground next to you
    i hold your hand one final time
    and whisper goodbye to this life
    i close my eyes for the last time
    your hand in mine
    good night my sweet valentine





    Submitted on 2008-04-07 00:59:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      so dark, but good overall... kind of scary tho! but i liked it :)
    | Posted on 2008-04-08 00:00:00 | by Kaygrl | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, so emotional! All the powerful feeling of possessiveness that can really drive you crazy. Something I can quite relate to heehee.
    | Posted on 2008-04-07 00:00:00 | by arodase | [ Reply to This ]


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