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you own me

Author: Squall Leon Hea
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Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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for a special somene , hope you like it..

you own me

Didn't know this before
That my life would get this Sour

At your absence even more
Pain Deep down into my core

I just now have understood
You own my heart than any would

It's wierd how I fell for you
Right now , being with you is what to do

Smile , smile and be happy love
For nothing is as magical as you lil dove

I say magical , because you bespelled me
Placed under a charm of Thy

With me , oh please , with me
Dear love , Dear Dear love , be

Submitted on 2008-04-07 02:36:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  aww its so sweet
| Posted on 2008-04-17 00:00:00 | by Druecilla | [ Reply to This ]
  Truley beautiful hun.....
I loved it :)

Thanks and mucho huggles
| Posted on 2008-04-07 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
  That was beautiful.
| Posted on 2008-04-07 00:00:00 | by Mena_Broken_Ang | [ Reply to This ]

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