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5 days.


Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
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5 days.



You can come back now,
It's been 5 days,
i say it's been 5 days now,
but i'll forgive you anyway
Cause the truth is.
I can't live without you.
You are all of everything to me
And It's paining me
Everyday that you're away from me
I lay alone and lonely in the dark
suffering from this insomnia
cause i just can't sleep.
It's been 5 days now and i can barely speak.
I wish you were close to me now
Close like it was
the days we drove in your car
Or slept under the stars
and promised each other forever
While you held my hand
looked in my eyes
and swore u could never see yourself
loving or being with another
And it kills me to think now-
Maybe It was all just a lie.
I'd give anything to ask you
and hear an honest reply

But as i lay here, in this open space
It's just me, the grass and the moonlit sky.
And even if i try to stop breathing
You don't leave me
Cause you were my everything
The love you gave me won't leave me
Doctor Doctor, give me another remedy
"Sorry my dear, there's nothing i can do"
-----
Come back to me.
I need you to ease my pain.
Please come back. and make it right again.

The silence is deafening
This shattered dream is heartbreaking
It was too soon to say perfect.
But it's been 5 days now,
I said it's been 5 days now-
And i must admit
things are turning for the worst.
I can't breathe.
Can you hear me operator?
Can you hear me?
-I'm speaking to a dead line




Submitted on 2008-04-07 03:49:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was very lyrical and would be great in many genres of music. I liked the "It's been 5 days now" & then repeating it.
Nice work!
love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
tif
| Posted on 2008-04-08 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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