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    Author: shootingstar
    ASL Info:    22/f/hell
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 102/120/21
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    momentarily paralyzed
    by a whisper through the darkness
    "where are you going?"
    but i'm too far gone already
    a memory
    Faded faster than my jeans
    more empty than my pockets
    Always running
    from what
    I'll never tell




    Submitted on 2008-04-07 14:54:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is deep, i think that just how short it is gives it that much more strength than lengthening it. i have to say the descriptions are good but if you were to add a description of the location or of the mental location would bring the reader farther into the message that is being expressed. Great thou keep it up!
    -Taylor (Titan)
    | Posted on 2008-04-07 00:00:00 | by titan | [ Reply to This ]


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