momentarily paralyzed
by a whisper through the darkness
"where are you going?"
but i'm too far gone already
a memory
Faded faster than my jeans
more empty than my pockets
Always running
from what
I'll never tell
this is deep, i think that just how short it is gives it that much more strength than lengthening it. i have to say the descriptions are good but if you were to add a description of the location or of the mental location would bring the reader farther into the message that is being expressed. Great thou keep it up!
-Taylor (Titan)
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