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    dots Submission Name: hey lovedots

    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 219
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 535
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 1345

       ok. so i let him read this one today before i posted it. omg. i didnt really reread it before i handed it to him. the only part i really wanted him to get out of it was when the wall fell down. idk. oh well. thats not the main point of it but read it and tell me what yout hink

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    dotshey lovedots

    hey love, i see you standing
    in the corner of my mind
    you once tried leaving behind
    into a past, i cant rewind
    or edit all the visions that we share
    and sometimes life aint fair
    but i hope you know how much i care
    how far id dare
    if only you would let me tear
    that barriar
    between us down, and together
    we will watch that wall
    as it begins to crumble and fall
    and we'll walk down that broken hall
    until the bits of terror fade
    and we could stay another day
    until i say
    that we're no longer meant to be
    but thats something ic ant see
    cuz i love you with all my heart
    even when i fall apart
    and everything get cold and dark
    and they try ripping us apart
    but i wont leave you
    in that dark-est time of our existence
    i cant stop this resistence
    thats between us
    i wont fuss
    somehow i promise to heal us
    so we're perfect
    your so perfect in my eyes
    please dont mind when i disguise
    myself cuz of their lies
    i still blame them
    until the end
    and i never could pretend
    to own more than just a pen
    but with it i will mend
    my stolen friend
    and our story still wont end

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