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    dots Submission Name: The Number Zero (My Apologies)dots
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    Author: lebeauvide
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 75/179/84
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       I know it doesn't have any punctuation, but I've always felt that punctuation limits what I'm trying to say.


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    dotsThe Number Zero (My Apologies)dots
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    I'm thinking of a number-
    And it is zero,
    For the number of times
    I'm going to apologize

    If I said I'm sorry,
    It would be a lie
    Because you pushed me
    To such extremes

    I do love you,
    And I never stopped
    But you've cut me so deep
    I don't think I can heal

    I'm trying desperately
    To cling to these walls
    That I've built so hastily
    To protect me from you

    I'm trying to let it be
    To let the dust settle
    I can't seem to escape you-
    I can't find a way out

    You've blocked off every exit
    As part of your master plan
    You're lighting my world on fire
    And leaving me to burn

    I didn't want any of this
    And I'll tell you that it's true
    I didn't want to be the one
    To be the death of you




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      This tells the tale of possessive love. Indeed there is abuse. You are right. There comes a time when someone is wished dead. But true to love's beholdeness, the day of justice never comes.
    | Posted on 2008-04-08 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]


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