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    dots Submission Name: A Monologue for the Broken Heartdots
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    Author: lebeauvide
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 75/179/84
    Words: 379
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
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    dotsA Monologue for the Broken Heartdots
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    Put none of thy faith in me,
    For I will disappoint and
    Squander it selfishly as a
    Human must. Allow me to
    Make you no promise, as
    I will most certainly destroy
    It, no matter how I try.
    It would be by my hand
    That you reached your
    Demise, unbeknownst to
    Either of us two, of course.
    Alas, I have once kissed thy
    Lips and ere, I have murdered
    Thee; I have unwittingly signed
    The Devil's contract and in
    Giving you up in my place, I
    Have doubly condemned myself.
    Be wary, all you that trust in
    Me- I am a selfish creature, by
    Whom courtesy and mercy are
    Not known. Tread lightly, as the
    World is much quieter now, though
    The wreckage still remains.
    If thou canst recall all of these
    Things I once promised to thee,
    Thou shalt find that all these are
    But falsities, though that was never
    My intent. I tried for your sake and mine,
    To let you slip away easily, perhaps even
    Unnoticed... Such separations are complex
    And I still find myself unable to fathom
    This empty part of myself that you used
    To fill . I cannot help but allow
    Myself to contemplate the depth
    Of this damnable abyss that continues
    To feed on me; this gaping hole that may
    Never be filled again. But is it worth such
    A misery that we found in eachother?
    The constant wars and verbal murders
    Were just too much to bear... Yes, I
    Love thee, and have loved thee, and
    Will always love thee... I just cannot
    Bring myself to remain in such a place
    That I found myself in before. I would
    Offer my apologies to thee, in exchange
    For a silent departure, but that would
    Mean that these aforementioned apologies
    Would have to exist. I am not sorry
    For the choices I have made. I will
    Always remember you, and you will always
    Be a part of me. If it is meant to be,
    Then it shall find its way. But as for now,
    There is nothing that shall remain
    Between us, save for my unwavering love
    For you, and this knife in my

    heart.




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      "Put none of thy faith in me,
    For I will disappoint and
    Squander it selfishly as a
    Human must."

    I loved the beginning. Being a complete misanthropic, I would have to agree with you. People are selfish, not matter how they try to deny it.

    This piece was rather lengthy, but it kept myattention till the end. Everyone experiences the disappointment of love, and loss..Overall, I really liked this piece, it's easy to relate to, and it is written in a very distinct way..I liked your diction a lot! Keep up the great work!

    -KiTTen
    | Posted on 2008-04-08 00:00:00 | by rainbowXrazors | [ Reply to This ]
      geez i just posted something like this too. love sucks. lol this piece is easy for me to relate to, ya know? how could i not painfully enjoy the read.
    | Posted on 2008-04-07 00:00:00 | by fryte | [ Reply to This ]


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