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    dots Submission Name: Joeydots
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    Author: Hazy skies
    ASL Info:    18/M/Texas
    Elite Ratio:    2.34 - 20/51/26
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsJoeydots
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    Mr. Crayola Man
    What have they done to you?
    They seem to have carved you down
    From a cheerful yellow to a deep blue

    You always you used to smile
    But now you just seem to frown
    thinking about all the times
    The world would just grind you down.

    Mr. Crayola man
    What did she tell you?
    Did she tell you about love,
    then left you in the pew?

    You just tried to give some color
    when the world was black & white
    but maybe someday Crayola Man
    they'll understand who was right

    Mr. Crayola Man

    Co. written by Bob D.





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      Mr. Crayola Man. I like this, the easy metaphor and child-like spin on it. Its likeable and its just....okay I just like it. The little remark about "grind you down" reminds me of the crayola crayons that have the sharperner builts into the back of the box. There's an underlying story, and we gets small peeks at it but overall, it leaves us wishing that Mr. Crayola Man wouldnt't be so blue, that he'd be the sunshine and rainbows he is so capable of creating. Thanks for the write. :)
    | Posted on 2010-09-27 00:00:00 | by SincerWritinAsh | [ Reply to This ]
      i really liked the analagies in this! it was an intersting peice, but good overall.
    | Posted on 2008-04-08 00:00:00 | by Kaygrl | [ Reply to This ]


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