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    dots Submission Name: Sa-fe Firedots
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    Author: Squall Leon Hea
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 104/79/29
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       hope it makes you happy


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    dotsSa-fe Firedots
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    To appreciate , I did not before
    Til I lost , and life turned sour

    But now I appreciate that I got a chance
    And to that cahnce my heart shall dance

    A name of a Gem
    A heart never goes dim

    A soul of fire
    But a Sa-fe fire that goes dire

    What does love hold now?
    I want to be better , but how?

    I want to please her-~sigh~
    Going to be hard , but glad to try

    I guess that is what love is all about
    And hopefully it shall fully sprout




    Submitted on 2008-04-08 02:25:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      but hom?
    I think its "but how?" ?

    And she probably loves you more than you no hun :)

    -Safire
    | Posted on 2008-04-08 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]


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