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Sa-fe Fire


Author: Squall Leon Hea
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Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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hope it makes you happy


Sa-fe Fire



To appreciate , I did not before
Til I lost , and life turned sour

But now I appreciate that I got a chance
And to that cahnce my heart shall dance

A name of a Gem
A heart never goes dim

A soul of fire
But a Sa-fe fire that goes dire

What does love hold now?
I want to be better , but how?

I want to please her-~sigh~
Going to be hard , but glad to try

I guess that is what love is all about
And hopefully it shall fully sprout




Submitted on 2008-04-08 02:25:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  but hom?
I think its "but how?" ?

And she probably loves you more than you no hun :)

-Safire
| Posted on 2008-04-08 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]


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