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    dots Submission Name: The right thing to do?dots
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    Author: StylerDen
    ASL Info:    29/Male/Malaysia
    Elite Ratio:    2.98 - 38/59/51
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe right thing to do?dots
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    I've fallen in love again,
    To this girl of only 19,
    i think ive made a mistake..
    of telling her to take 1st priority on her studies...
    Now i long for her,
    ive written her a song,
    Ive almost been like a stalker...
    silently loving her,
    of fear that i may distract her,
    fear of loosing her care,
    fear of another broken dream,
    fear id make a mistake that i would regret for life..
    have i already made it?
    i want to tell her that i need her,
    and i want to wait no more,
    i want to hold her hand,
    i want to know her more...
    i want to share my dreams,
    i want to give my best,
    id like to be her man,
    id like to be her man....




    Submitted on 2008-04-08 09:42:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can really under stand what you are saying because I feel the same about on girl I know and I could almost say I love her and yet we can't be together. I like this good job.

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