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sweet child


Author: Squall Leon Hea
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Words: 163
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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To little Girl Anna

you will be together soon


sweet child



Child bless , Child Bless
how did you fall to this?

Unfair rule of the abyss
To be taken from the person you no miss

A gentle person , you love so
taken away by unfair law

world , oh world , what do you gain?
trying to drive this person insane?

Child Bless , Child Bless
do not cry over this

your mommy loves you no matter what
even if every door was shut

she will reach you and hold close
and for a second the world shall pause

to witness the miracle of life ahead.
dear child get ready for bed

Your mommy is going to sing you lullaby to sleep
and believe , down down deep

you will be with her soon enough
and you will talk to her about alot of stuff

to soul to heart , you shall unite
and all the world will hold for that sight




Submitted on 2008-04-08 12:13:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  that was so sweet....why didnt anyone else comment? anyways...that was really good, it made me feel like i was the child, like i was there....good work, keep writing, sorry i dont know what else to write, but it was really good, it made me happy....
| Posted on 2008-04-25 00:00:00 | by Kornfreakinabox | [ Reply to This ]


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