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    dots Submission Name: sweet childdots
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    Author: Squall Leon Hea
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 104/79/29
    Words: 163
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 962
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 956



    Description:
       To little Girl Anna

    you will be together soon


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    dotssweet childdots
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    Child bless , Child Bless
    how did you fall to this?

    Unfair rule of the abyss
    To be taken from the person you no miss

    A gentle person , you love so
    taken away by unfair law

    world , oh world , what do you gain?
    trying to drive this person insane?

    Child Bless , Child Bless
    do not cry over this

    your mommy loves you no matter what
    even if every door was shut

    she will reach you and hold close
    and for a second the world shall pause

    to witness the miracle of life ahead.
    dear child get ready for bed

    Your mommy is going to sing you lullaby to sleep
    and believe , down down deep

    you will be with her soon enough
    and you will talk to her about alot of stuff

    to soul to heart , you shall unite
    and all the world will hold for that sight




    Submitted on 2008-04-08 12:13:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      that was so sweet....why didnt anyone else comment? anyways...that was really good, it made me feel like i was the child, like i was there....good work, keep writing, sorry i dont know what else to write, but it was really good, it made me happy....
    | Posted on 2008-04-25 00:00:00 | by Kornfreakinabox | [ Reply to This ]


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