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    dots Submission Name: Whispering Worlddots

    Author: S.A.M.
    ASL Info:    26/f/xx
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 476/419/137
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 849
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 910

       Something I came up with a while back. Hope you enjoy, please comment.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsWhispering Worlddots

    Hello world,
    Where have you gone?
    Was yesterday a dream . . .
    will tomorrow ever come ?
    Do you do this for amusement
    or is there a purpose to the madness?
    Speak will you!
    They say you are the wisest to be found
    if only you would reveal your wisdom.
    Silence covers desolate land,
    not even the trees dare whisper to their leaves
    and the water stands warmly frozen in it's bed.
    " Secrets are meant to be kept
    and that is what must be done,
    do not ask your silly questions
    I'll not play your silly human games,
    Listen to the wind . . . . .
    for then the answers you may find,
    till then, you'll never know!"
    The voice came soft yet stern,
    whispers on the calming breeze.
    The boy turned ,
    and listened. . . .

    Submitted on 2008-04-08 21:36:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Its very good,the boy for me could actually represent primitive man,gluttonous for a reason to exist,searching to know the world and its secrets,its lands

    then you couild say we went to outer-space lol

    but you get what Im sayin because i think its what you were saying,those kind of answers come from within almost,when your willing to listen

    it was a great poem

    | Posted on 2008-11-20 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not sure. I liked it until this line popped up.
    Speak will you!
    From then on, it felt like I were talking to Yoda or something. Not sure why, but hey, thats just me, right? TTYL.

    Love Eternally,
    | Posted on 2008-09-17 00:00:00 | by faded color | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah,That was definately great,I gave it a vote of five,also I had to add it to my favorites.

    now on to the comments,
    I love the way it begins,It makes me feel like Screaming to the heavens for awnsers,
    This is such a great piece,like a QnA with the gods,or god,or whatever.
    definately keep it up and I will keep reading.
    | Posted on 2008-04-08 00:00:00 | by Diablo Tapitio | [ Reply to This ]

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