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Lil Soul

Author: Squall Leon Hea
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To a dear friend and family

Sis , cheer up

Lil Soul

Do not blame yourself Lil Soul
For no matter what , you are pure

He might have played you for a fool
But for that only you hold the cure

Gentle soul , you shall not fall
But go up high , when you hear the call

Family , Hope , and Support you are to me
I wish that you can see

What good you have done to all
And how important is your role

To everyone you know
To everysoul you saw

So cheer up little soul
And share your bless with all

Submitted on 2008-04-09 02:34:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  what god you have done to all ?
i think this needs fixin

| Posted on 2008-04-09 00:00:00 | by acapone | [ Reply to This ]

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