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    dots Submission Name: Glass Shapersdots
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    Author: Derrick Thomas
    ASL Info:    24/Male/Alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 21/59/39
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Serious
    Total Views: 750
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    dotsGlass Shapersdots
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    It's like...

    The world is made of glass. Tiny strikes cause fast cracks. Everyone can see through everything, not knowing people are looking right back through them. We all know whats best.

    And...

    Intense hot flashes, they cause the glass to melt. The world reshapes, skewing our views. No one lets the fire die down. They hungrily keep it burning. Maybe I liked the way it was shaped? Despite the newly skewed glass, we all still know whats best.


    I need something cool. Find me, keep my world frozen.




    Submitted on 2008-04-09 06:27:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You are a prettu damn good writer.
    | Posted on 2009-03-12 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Understood and well taken. I loved the feeling of "just let my world be", too bad everyone who "knows best" will forever run our status quo thoughts. I guess you could move to Antarctica, both barren and frozen, rule the penguins and make your own glass bubble. Maybe not, anyway, enjoyed the piece, thanks.
    | Posted on 2008-07-29 00:00:00 | by Nicholas Lala | [ Reply to This ]
      This piece is very mellow, almost somber. The metaphor of life and glass is done quite well, and is fairly accurate. The writing itself is very nice, but the message I get from it makes me think things I can not say aloud to you without being gratuitously hostile.
    I wish you the best, and commend you on this piece.
    | Posted on 2008-04-09 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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