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    dots Submission Name: Aarondots
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    Author: Aangskate
    ASL Info:    18/male
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 133/117/44
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 1146
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 780



    Description:
       In the loving memory of Aaron, friend and fellow writer. We wont forget...


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    dotsAarondots
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    Aaron's gone
    but his memory lives forever on,
    warm in the hearts of those he touched.
    He's watching those he left behind.
    His body's cold, his chest is still.
    The tears are fresh and they've lost the will,
    yet they'll make it,
    even if they sometimes have to fake it.
    The stone above his grave,
    telling of the love he gave.
    The mound of dirt still fresh,
    the flowers still in bloom.
    The rain falls,bringing fresh tears,
    but the sun will come again to share new smiles.
    Years will past and tears will fade,
    but his memory will never die,
    alive in the hearts of his twin, family, and friends.
    We miss you buddy.
    This is goodbye...




    Submitted on 2008-04-09 11:21:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I just have to say, thank you. You've done something I'm still afraid to do. Thank you...
    | Posted on 2008-07-02 00:00:00 | by Max Million | [ Reply to This ]
      its never goodbye if theres still a memory of him, thanks for the comment on my latest post, this was good, the lines that caught my attention were

    The stone above his grave,
    telling of the love he gave.

    thats good
    | Posted on 2008-05-17 00:00:00 | by Master Bates | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, this is so sad, but deftly done! I hope poor Aaron was not your twin... very nicely written tribute poem... bravo... bravo...
    | Posted on 2008-04-25 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      Reading this made me think of personal loss of loved ones. Feelings I would normally bury, but nice job anyways. And I am sorry for your loss.
    | Posted on 2008-04-22 00:00:00 | by Immortalis | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really good. I'm sorry about the loss of your friend. It's hard to lose someone who you really care about, I know. Two of my friends died last year, one two months and the other a month and a half before their high school graduation.

    This poem is really sweet and sincere. I'm in class right now and I'm trying not to cry. That shows how good this poem is, because I don't know you or Aaron and this poem really touched me.

    Nice Write
    ~*~katara~*~
    | Posted on 2008-04-16 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]
      *wipes away tears* thank you so much for this poem. do you mind if i use it in my monthly mag at school? and Aaron told me once that he always looked foreward to RPing with you. this poem means so much to me thank you.
    | Posted on 2008-04-13 00:00:00 | by PrincessOfDark | [ Reply to This ]


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