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    dots Submission Name: She Is...dots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 679
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsShe Is...dots
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    Red Amongst,
    the Black and White,
    vibrant to those,
    who lack the life,
    energy an passion,
    she holds within her heart,
    injects in me,
    into those inward parts,
    that affect me, directly,
    hence she is my weakness,
    Pretense fails,
    correctly forming a pale bleakness,
    Is it really okay?
    that I failed to see this?
    No foreshadowing,
    to tell I'd be sleepless,
    Speechless I know,
    No matter what was said,
    I can never change her color,
    She Is...




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      This was another well written poem. Detailed, flowing, and deep. Magnificent! I can relate to this closely. Keep up the great work, and I'll keep reading.

    Haely
    | Posted on 2008-11-12 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very complicated - the beginning is like love and admiration - the second half is like sorrow and feeling left out - I know this happens and it represents, well, the more frequent conflict of emotions.
    Well done!
    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    TIF
    | Posted on 2008-04-09 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Damn, very well done. I like your style. I really don't comment often on people's stuff because most of it sucks, but i like the meter and the rhyme scheme to this one. The subject matter really fits the flow and i like how you spoke of changing her color and not her, as if her color was a separate entity while still suggesting it was connected her. Job well done!

    -Rob
    | Posted on 2008-04-09 00:00:00 | by robertbwell | [ Reply to This ]


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