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    dots Submission Name: The Wishdots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsThe Wishdots
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    I met her in the Temple of the Moon
    On some enchanted isle Southwest of Crete,
    Both Siren and a goddess, not discreet,
    She said shed grant to me one wish, a boon.
    At midnight when the stars hung in festoon,
    We kissed far from the nearest road or street,
    She was so lovely, feral, tart and sweet,
    Down by the bay, beside a cold lagoon.

    My wish was that my love for her might last,
    She smiled and cooed its done, my senseless boy!
    Its sixty years and I look to the Past,
    Not Space nor Time could my strong love destroy.
    Alas, her spell was cold. Her love she kept,
    Now all these years and nights, alone, Ive wept.





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      Damn. Spectacular. I never get over your love poems, or rather love lost/betrayed poems. As this surely is a betrayal, but for a wish that was not the smartest to hope for.
    Love it, and love Ron's explanation of it.

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2008-04-10 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      Delightful! Aaaah, those lovely ladies, Sirens all! No chance have we mere mortal men! They have more power in ruby lips and a seductive smile than we have with the strength of Goliath!!!

    Another most excellent work from you, my gifted friend in letters!!!
    | Posted on 2008-04-09 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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