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    dots Submission Name: decieving strengthdots
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    Author: annie smith
    ASL Info:    20/f
    Elite Ratio:    5.26 - 75/61/24
    Words: 265
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
    Total Views: 577
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1674



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       ex boyfriends.


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    dotsdecieving strengthdots
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    i have no need for any one.
    esspecially you.

    i am strong.
    on one can break me down.

    i threw away your obcessing love.
    but kept your loving friendship.

    a good strong friendship was what we had.
    not minding what was in the past.

    i told you i was upset.
    i cried in your arms.

    you told me it was ok.
    you told me not to worry.

    then you kissed me pasionitly.
    a kiss made for lovers.

    i tried to move.
    you growled at me.

    you kissed me harder.
    i cried harder.

    the tears flowed.
    you bit my neck.

    i push you off me.
    i fall to the floor.

    you left me huddeled in a corner.
    tears flowing down my face.

    my fault, my fault, my fault
    the words ring throu my mind

    im sorry i sob.
    you carress my lips.

    you lay me down on the cold hard floor.
    you kiss my throat.

    your eyes show lust.
    mine hold teary pain.

    you lean over me.
    with one last, never ending kiss, you leave.

    hoarsly telling me its my fault it happened.
    my fault, my fault, my fault.

    what am i to you?
    a game? a toy?

    the deception, the pain.
    why did you do it?

    i thought i could trust you.
    my best friend.

    but it was my fault.
    you told me so.

    i thought i was strong.
    i thought no one could break me down.

    ...then there was you.




    Submitted on 2008-04-09 15:29:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      1st off,im sure writing this piece helped u vent and figure this situation out if its true.its main strength poetically is the emotion behind it,yet im not really feeling the structure of the 2-line verses.what i reconized immediatly was the strength and pride this put forth in the begining,but it disappeared rather quickly...and by the way,dont let yourself take any blame here @ all...no way...keep up the pen game tho!....crazy
    | Posted on 2008-04-10 00:00:00 | by crazyphreshone | [ Reply to This ]


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