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    dots Submission Name: Colored Paper Lanternsdots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 167
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsColored Paper Lanternsdots

    Colored Paper Lanterns
    Nestled in the tree

    Sky blue, sun yellow,
    goldenrod & green of pea;

    Swaying softly in the breeze
    rustling the budding trees ~ ~

    Soft hues
    Singing blues

    Illumingating Spring greens
    Everchanging scenes...

    Dark night
    Illuminated squares

    Shining on
    Picnic 4 Teddy Bears

    Garcia & Grisman
    belting out a tune

    Shooting stars
    rising from the moon;

    Colored Paper Lanterns



    Submitted on 2008-04-09 16:19:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      What a playful and partylike mood this one has! It was absolutely delightful, and gives one a vivid mind picture of the colored lanterns!!
    | Posted on 2008-04-15 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Very much a fun poem! I could picture those lanterns and smile at the teddies. I like the style of this this one. :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2008-04-12 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      what i liked about this was not only the obvious topic and the way you gave such a colorful and detailed description, but the way in which you styled/presented this piece, especially the last part. it's different and i think it stands out for that reason as well, "picnic 4 teddy bears"
    | Posted on 2008-04-09 00:00:00 | by scissorhands | [ Reply to This ]

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