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    dots Submission Name: A Little Polishingdots
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    Author: Raistlin Sith
    ASL Info:    22/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 106/182/66
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsA Little Polishingdots
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    I was sure that I was him
    until I woke up from the dream
    with the pencil in my hand,
    still tying up that seam.

    The plot just wasn't thick enough,
    some characters too dull,
    most scenes are not quite finished;
    there's much left still to cull.

    I've been focusing too much
    on the way this tree should look
    but the reader doesn't care
    which direction the leaves shook.

    But I think that I have something here,
    a diamond in the rough;
    It just needs a little polishing,
    the part I find so tough.




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      I like this.

    It reminds me of my own journey with poetry. All poems are diamonds in the rough, but how you want to cut them is up to you.

    They can be left raw, or hardened and polished, or sheared, but hey, to each his own.

    I tend to see poems as moments and the direct reflection of them. This is what makes them so hard to change, again, like diamonds.

    The rhyme wasn't bad either. Pretty steady on the rhythm.
    | Posted on 2011-02-17 00:00:00 | by BlankSheet | [ Reply to This ]


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