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    dots Submission Name: Grand-Fatherdots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 625
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 537



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    dotsGrand-Fatherdots
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    At night I feel my grandfather
    In a missing beat,
    I see him in a chair
    No longer there,
    In a shitty comment
    And a shittier grin.
    Weezing on a oxygen tank
    Swimming in half a lung,
    I see him in an abscences of
    My grandmother's eyes.
    I see him in the man I am
    And the man he raised.
    I miss the man
    Who was always there;
    Wise, but unknowing
    To his fate.
    I went to bed late,
    Woke to a whisper
    That was his Life.




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    ||| Comments |||
      Wow...very emotional and you can really feel how attatched you were to him. It honestly brought a tear to my eye.

    Structually, I would have liked to have seen it in two or three stanzas.

    Great job,

    ~KimbreRain
    | Posted on 2011-03-24 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]
      "woke to a whisper / that was his life"

    that is beautiful...

    you capture different sides of him in this...and from different perspectives...how others viewed him...

    nice tribute to him...

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-03-18 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      that was so sad...
    | Posted on 2009-01-13 00:00:00 | by PhantomRose | [ Reply to This ]


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