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    dots Submission Name: Consciousdots
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    Author: Morsketch
    ASL Info:    21/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 27/26/26
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 665
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 507



    Description:
       Rated R for cursing and imagery.

    :P

    Gut reaction to getting jerked around.


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    dotsConsciousdots
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    Cold steel chain around her neck;
    Drag her through the bleeding mud;
    Drown her in a shit filled ditch;
    Blind the mindless fucking bitch;

    Crack her neck one more time;
    Choke her, brand her, neat and stark;
    Bloat her body stiff and sore;
    She’ll always be your cracked toy whore;

    Mind personified as a form;
    A body rapist of the mind;
    A wretched heart does lightning synch;
    Static shocks for that bound wench.




    Submitted on 2008-04-10 01:46:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      intense, go into detail more.
    | Posted on 2008-04-11 00:00:00 | by SetmyselfonFire | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok, um, wow. Seems you either have a lot of hatred for this person or maybe you just have a really sick twisted little mind. -lol- It was a good poem. As you said in your description it did have some cussing, but in this poem I would say it was needed for it really added to the effect. Good job.
    | Posted on 2008-04-10 00:00:00 | by BeautifulSoul | [ Reply to This ]


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