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    dots Submission Name: Strange Stardots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsStrange Stardots
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    I took a little golden jar
    And placed it there,
    Beneath a shining silver star
    In that night air.

    And from that star fell golden mead
    That jar to fill,
    Its volume did the rim exceed.
    I watched it spill.

    From that spilt mead slim fairies grew
    With wings of pearl
    Then round about the aspens flew
    Each tiny girl.

    And I was filled with tears and sighs,
    Oh, magic jar!
    And mused upon these midnight skies,
    And that strange star.




    Submitted on 2008-04-10 11:25:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was a delightful poem that created vivid images! It reads virtually like a Fairy Tale, and I enjoyed the merry, fantacy mood of the poem! These are the little goodwill fairies, that arise from Golden Mead, and fly about spreading merriment to all who are about them!!!!!

    These little fairies rest too in every pint of Golden Ale!!!
    | Posted on 2008-04-13 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice! I really liked the imagery that I got while reading your poem. It envoked so many emotions in me. I really liked the ending.
    | Posted on 2008-04-11 00:00:00 | by ImperfectGirl1 | [ Reply to This ]
      It's pretty, and the imgery is good. But I really don't like it nearly as much as a lot of your other poetry. Some of it just felt too much like a child's nursery rhyme. I think it could be improved.
    | Posted on 2008-04-11 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, so magical. I like your imagination, and this poem is just wonderfully light and dreamy. Especially the movement of star falling and fairies flying, all in order that it feels like a bedtime story. I like the ending of 'that strange star' it gives an air of mystery leaving me to wonder at this magical event.
    | Posted on 2008-04-11 00:00:00 | by arodase | [ Reply to This ]
      Ooooh, Nice fantasy even with beautiful images.
    you kinda make me want to go there.
    Very well written.

    The poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2008-04-10 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]


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